Phil woke up at 6:45. After Phil turned off the alarm clock he stood up and said “I’m gonna get the promotion at the bank”. He walked to the bathroom were he showered and brushed his teeth. After Phil got out of the bathroom he walked to the kitchen to eat his breakfast which was a chocolate pop tart. Phil woofed down his pop tart and got in his car to go to work. He arrived at 7:58, two minutes early. He got out of his car and met eyes with his rival, Gary. They both walked in together and Gary said “may the best man win” because the promotion was between them too. The manager, Brennan, called everybody's attention to announce who got the promotion. Brennan said that Gary got the promotion and Phil became very jealous. When Gary walked to Brennan to shake his hand a robber burst through the door and pointed the gun at Gary, when Phil saw this he didn't know what made him do this but he ran towards Gary and took the bullet for him. The robber ran away but Phil would be remembered as a hero.
I like it how your story is very straight forward. That is good since it is a short story.
ReplyDeleteI like this story. How long did it take you to think it up? It was very brave of Phil to take the bullet, if I was in his shoes I don't think I Would've taken the bullet.
ReplyDeleteI like how much you get out of this story for it only being a short story. I admire Phil taking the bullet I don't think I would of done it.
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